Wednesday, May 1, 2013

Evan’s Story Elevator Speech



Evan’s Story Elevator Speech
Evan’s parents knew he would be born with a crippling birth defect. The dangerous kidney disease was an added shock. Against the odds, Evan grew into adulthood, blessing the lives of many along the way.
This is his story, as told by me, his father. It is a saga of sore trials and miracles, sadness and joy, disappointments and triumphs. But above all, it is a story of love and our faith in God.
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2 comments:

  1. UnknownMay 1, 2013 at 9:29 PM

    Starts out 3rd person then shifts to 1st person, should you do that?

    Evan's story begins before he was born when his parents found out that he...

    While some might have ended his story before he was even born we ...

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  2. Mike PriceMay 4, 2013 at 9:55 AM

    I changed the first line to first person. I alos added ..."tears and laughter.."

    What do you think now?

    We knew Evan would be born with a crippling birth defect. The dangerous kidney disease was an added shock. Against the odds, Evan grew into adulthood, blessing the lives of many along the way.
    This is his story, as told by me, his father. It is a saga of sore trials and miracles, sadness and joy, tears and laughter, disappointments and triumphs. But above all, it is a story of love and our faith in God.

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